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Parachutes
(you’re alone)


It’s that sort of feeling
That you can only see
And not touch

The characteristics
        of Copper
        in the night sky
Beauty seen, not felt
A low-lying moon
Beneath the haze of Jupiter

It’s an interplanetary state of mind
And you’re a star
                    my little angel
        You’re a star           In the night sky
                                         Shining      Glowing
                                   A dream of daybreak
And here                                            daybreak
Among giants                                   The Gloaming
Your hands turn cold                      The Gloaming
Your cheeks grow hot
And
You realize.
©2007-2009 ~Kruszewski
:iconkruszewski:

Author's Comments

05.31.07
It's been a while.
It feels so good to know that I can still speak on paper.
I was losing faith.

parachute |? par?? sh o?t| noun a cloth canopy that fills with air and allows a person or heavy object attached to it to descend slowly when dropped from an aircraft, or that is released from the rear of an aircraft on landing to act as a brake.

alone |??l?n| adjective & adverb 1 having no one else present; on one's own : [as predic. adj. ] she was alone that evening | [as adv. ] he lives alone. • without others' help or participation; single-handed : team members are more effective than individuals working alone. • [as adj. ] isolated and lonely : she was terribly alone and exposed. • having no companions in a particular position or course of action : they were not alone in dissenting from the advice. 2 [as adv. ] indicating that something is confined to the specified subject or recipient : we agreed to set up such a test for him alone | it is Congress alone that can declare war. • used to emphasize that only one factor out of several is being considered and that the whole is greater or more extreme : there were fifteen churches in the town center alone.

I'm starting to take multiple definitions of words into more consideration. literarily.

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:icondomicespit:
It is good.
Nice job.

There is the end of what I can say about it.
:iconseeminglydepressed91:
I don't know what to say about the poem right now because it's really early in the morning.
...but I was wondering about the mixed use of words for "dawn" and "sunset" -- basically, did you mean to use the two terms or was it supposed to all be the same time of day?

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:iconkruszewski:
Heh, well, thank you for reading and taking the time to comment Thal, I truly appreciate it.
:iconkruszewski:
That's interesting, I had never originally perceived the two terms as meaning the same time of day...but I suppose they could be interpreted that way. When I wrote it, I was thinking in terms of many different and contrasting things happening at once, thinking of "daybreak" as a reference to the commencing of something and "the Gloaming" as a sort of closing or conclusion, being on different ends of wherever they may be...yet, they could both be in the same place after all...oh man, that's so cool ^-^

eh...that would only work in the sense of poetic and literary interpretation, however cool it may be. "Gloaming" is actually defined as twilight or dusk, in this case I chose twilight, but the point is that the sun has already set, so it isn't exactly sunset. Although, twilight can also occur before sunrise, or in this case, daybreak. It brings out other ways to interpret the piece...I don't want to go into things too much, I do want people to shape it on their own for themselves...

This is probably why I was contented by the concept and the words I was using when I wrote it...I could see variables, I like variables.

Thanks.
:icondomicespit:
I read everything that comes up, just not past things.
:iconseeminglydepressed91:
I know what it is defined as, that's why I asked.

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